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Sunday, March 11, 2007

Stupid, I am.

That I want from you,
you don't know.
That I give you,
you don't want.
Destination.
Is that all I want?
Journey.
That’s all I want.
Discomfort.
That I won’t cause.
Fade.
I will, into time.
Silent.
It will be.
Difference.
You won’t realize.
Everything.
I have.
Happy.
I should be.
You.
I don’t have.
Hurt.
Should I be?

PS: Comment. You have to. It sucks. That’s true. Write it. I will feel better. :)
:: posted by Venkat C, 3/11/2007 08:54:00 PM

10 Comments:

Dude! Its a great concept... *clap* *clap* :)
but..
but...
sheesh :|... what the heck! you've asked for comments, so here goes...
There are so many grammatical errors passing off under the garb of poetic license! Sorry, the grammar check in me is working overtime!
Anyways, a nice poem, once again :D
Keep 'em comin!!!
Blogger A penny for my thoughts?, at 10:21 PM, March 11, 2007  
ran it through ms word and corrected them... thanks! single word sentences are still flagged as errors, but cant help it.. poetic licence:)
Blogger FJ, at 10:32 PM, March 11, 2007  
and do tell me if u see any more errors :)
Blogger FJ, at 10:34 PM, March 11, 2007  
good one
Blogger Prathiba, at 11:24 PM, March 11, 2007  
:), great! Now its a beautiful, thoughtful and grammatically correct poem!
Hail poetic licence!!!
Blogger A penny for my thoughts?, at 11:26 PM, March 11, 2007  
I think we should give a name for your style of poetry! It should sound something similar like "break-dance" for "dancing". So, any suggestions readers!

Here is mine "poetic-breaks"!

Good one FJ!
Anonymous blade bala, at 2:24 AM, March 12, 2007  
Run
She will.
Write
Like this if you.
Relax
You should.
Commenting
I am.

:) Nice ideas... but it is like junoon tamil. :(
Anonymous Phoenix, at 8:49 AM, March 13, 2007  
feel better.
Now.
I am. :DD

It sucked.
I know.
Junoon Tamil.
It sucked so much.
I dint know :))
Ran away.
Already.
She.

HA ha ..I started enjoying this now..celebrating mediocrity :D
Blogger FJ, at 11:38 AM, March 13, 2007  
nice poem...
"stupid"- I am sure ur not :)
Blogger astrocrazy2005, at 4:18 PM, March 15, 2007  
Thank you, Astrocrazy :D
Blogger FJ, at 10:36 AM, March 18, 2007  

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