That I want from you,
you don't know.
That I give you,
you don't want.
Destination.
Is that all I want?
Journey.
That’s all I want.
Discomfort.
That I won’t cause.
Fade.
I will, into time.
Silent.
It will be.
Difference.
You won’t realize.
Everything.
I have.
Happy.
I should be.
You.
I don’t have.
Hurt.
Should I be?
PS: Comment. You have to. It sucks. That’s true. Write it. I will feel better. :)
10 comments:
Dude! Its a great concept... *clap* *clap* :)
but..
but...
sheesh :|... what the heck! you've asked for comments, so here goes...
There are so many grammatical errors passing off under the garb of poetic license! Sorry, the grammar check in me is working overtime!
Anyways, a nice poem, once again :D
Keep 'em comin!!!
ran it through ms word and corrected them... thanks! single word sentences are still flagged as errors, but cant help it.. poetic licence:)
and do tell me if u see any more errors :)
good one
:), great! Now its a beautiful, thoughtful and grammatically correct poem!
Hail poetic licence!!!
I think we should give a name for your style of poetry! It should sound something similar like "break-dance" for "dancing". So, any suggestions readers!
Here is mine "poetic-breaks"!
Good one FJ!
Run
She will.
Write
Like this if you.
Relax
You should.
Commenting
I am.
:) Nice ideas... but it is like junoon tamil. :(
feel better.
Now.
I am. :DD
It sucked.
I know.
Junoon Tamil.
It sucked so much.
I dint know :))
Ran away.
Already.
She.
HA ha ..I started enjoying this now..celebrating mediocrity :D
nice poem...
"stupid"- I am sure ur not :)
Thank you, Astrocrazy :D
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